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My thing, a little dark tonight:

Am I dying?
Why can't I be cryin?
Why, baby, why?

Baby, I wanna feel so high
I wanna touch the sky with you
I want to live up to all the things
I promised us to
I want to make all our beautiful dreams
Still come true
Just for you

It just seems lately I'm unable to
Live up to what we thought I was
able to

It just seems lately I'm just too weak
To even try to speak my mind
Lately I'm just too lazy too
And I'm kinda neurotic and crazy
But that you always knew

Am I dying?
Sure feels like I am inside
Am I lying?
Tell me, baby, why would I?

I don't say it lady, but I pray and pray and
Most of the time
I just wanna find a place to hide
A simply sublime frame of mind
A perfect holy place of peace
Where no pain can come inside
A place made in my head
A place no light can escape
No hate or flames can invade
A dark private space to have some piece of mind
To cleanse this tainted soul of mine
To mend this tired heart and mind

Lately I've been needing your help just to survive
Without you Baby,
Don't know how I'd even get by
Is this what the best felt in their worst days?
Is it really all meant to end this way?
Did I live all my life
Just to die today?

You're having scary dreams
Dreams in which I die
On my chest you're cryin'
And inside so am I
But lately even when I try
Baby I can't even bring myself to cry
Hot tears come to my eyes
But remain stuck inside
Baby just like you and I

Am I dyin?
Why ain't I risin' again
Even tryin' just to survive?
Why, God, why?

Why am I so weak
So terribly tender inside
When I've come from stock so strong
Who lived so long and stood so tall with pride
While I stoop so low and hang my head in shame
For all the things I can't even feel
Yet I take the blame for in my mind

Have I lost the will to trudge on by?
It ain't cause of you
You're the only thing I'm
Really dedicated to
Cos at this point
I'm just a lost lonely boy

But baby,
I'm gonna try
Try to keep on
Try to press on
Try to smile
Try to survive
Baby just for you and I